tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7072760.post2364717171659478527..comments2023-09-05T08:38:04.858+01:00Comments on Rameau's Nephew: 'Odalisque' by PF Jeffery (DFL's Comments)Nemonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13308850492930940749noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7072760.post-41704465005110682102008-11-18T15:06:00.000+00:002008-11-18T15:06:00.000+00:00I don't know how it seems to the reader, but it wa...I don't know how it seems to the reader, but it wasn't until writing this part of the book that I realised how claustrophobic the Palace Victoria had become.<BR/><BR/>*************************<BR/><BR/>If the action passes from the theatrical to the cinematic, it is apt that there is a reference to Alfred Hitchcock. Lay Town Zone was, of course, Mr Hitchcock's birthplace. Lay Town Zone, in our time, harbours an unrequited pride in Alfred Hitchcock. He hated the place. It isn't entirely surprising that Lay Town Zone still recalls him (albeit dimly and inaccurately) in Tuerqui's time.<BR/><BR/>*******************************<BR/><BR/>Should anyone wish to trace Tuerqui's route in a London A-Z, the most obvious route from Lay Town Zone to Hammer Town is via Grove Green Road. The route from Hammer Town to Doll's Town should be fairly obvious.<BR/><BR/>My notes for writing this section included a extensive list of the places through which Tuerqui's party passed (with distances and probable times). But the demands of both the narrative and the novel agreed in not continuing to specify the places beyond Doll's Town. The demands of the narrative because there is no reason why any of them would know the settlements and, therefore, Tuerqui would probably have been unaware of the place names. The demands of the novel because, whilst the sequence of three places (Lay Town Zone - Hammer Town - Doll's Town) reads well enough (I think), too much topographical detail would soon have become tedious. Beyond Doll's Town, the next settlement would probably be what we call Canonbury, although the name is likely to have become changed a little by Tuerqui's time.<BR/><BR/>**********************<BR/><BR/>It is clear that Tuerqui does not regard nazemen as human. Referring to a savage beast as "it" is not unusual.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7072760.post-62294582376050388122008-11-18T14:32:00.000+00:002008-11-18T14:32:00.000+00:00Parfait! :-)Parfait! :-)Nemonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13308850492930940749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7072760.post-28818885618847260752008-11-18T14:26:00.000+00:002008-11-18T14:26:00.000+00:00I've added the word "as" in line with your suggest...I've added the word "as" in line with your suggestion, and also inserted a comma. The sentence now reads:<BR/><BR/>We were bothered by flies at which the horses swished their tails -- and, as we sometimes slapped too late, I emerged with several bites.<BR/><BR/>How does that seem?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7072760.post-79181661095060615272008-11-18T14:12:00.000+00:002008-11-18T14:12:00.000+00:00I'd add 'as' between 'and' and 'we'.I'd add 'as' between 'and' and 'we'.Nemonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13308850492930940749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7072760.post-36600876784838167882008-11-18T13:45:00.000+00:002008-11-18T13:45:00.000+00:00Thank you for that!Both typos now corrected."Reign...Thank you for that!<BR/><BR/>Both typos now corrected.<BR/><BR/>"Reigned" looks like a spelling mistake -- although I am fully aware of the difference between "reigned" and "reined", so I suppose it's a typo. My slight befuddlement, here, may have to do with power. To reign is to hold a position of power. To rein is to exert one's power over a horse.<BR/><BR/>After a little thought, I've made a small change to the punctuation and word order of the sentence you query. It now reads:<BR/><BR/>We were bothered by flies at which the horses swished their tails -- and we sometimes slapped too late, I emerged with several bites.<BR/><BR/>Do you think that addresses the difficulty?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com